Haiku, Senryu


first crush-

I was too intrigued to think

it’ll wither so soon


fascinating cloud

collapsed by my warm breath-

a melting mirror


For Carpe Diem Special # 72.


19 thoughts on “Collapsed

  1. Pingback: Carpe Diem Haiku Kai – Irkutsk | Hamish 'Managua' Gunn's Thoughts on Forest Walks

  2. Thinking about a ‘first crush’ made me smile. Yes, at the time it was so serious….but, as all first crushes, it was a very temporary thing. But no one could have convinced me of that reality at the time!

  3. Withering and melting are actually generous metaphors for the loss of first love! My prompt this week here on Wednesday is about mirrors, too. You’ll need to write anew or build on this one. Beautiful.

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